I wrote a story about mirrors. Please proofread. Please use CAPITALS when ou change anything. Or put it in (brackets). This will help me notice the changes easily. Thanks in advance.
The Magical Mirrors
Author: Rizwan Ahmed Memon
People often take magical concepts for granted. They think that these are myths – or the lies of the past. However, the concept of magic is as old as this universe. Great sages of the past not only believed in the magic, but they also learned it. Unlike all other common people, Nooro, too, thought of magic the same way unless he found three mirrors.
Nooro was a constructer. His ancestors were very famous for their construction skills. In his village, there was an ancient mansion of the landlady, Neengar, who had died more than two centuries ago. The grandson of the deceased landlady, Asad, returned from England after forty years. He wanted the palace to look new again. “Advertise in the newspapers that grand construction companies are invited to submit their proposals for the mega construction project,” Asad said to the caretakers of the mansion.
“Sir, you perhaps don’t want to change the shape or design of this castle. It is an inheritance. However, you should make the necessary repairs.”
“You are right. This mansion should remain in the same design. By the way, who had built it?”
“Nooro’s ancestors. Nooro is also a good constructer -- a chip of the old block.”
“All right. Invite Nooro to the castle. I would like to meet him tomorrow.”
When Nooro was a boy, his grandmother used to tell him about the three magical mirrors in the castle of Neengar. According to her, the three mirrors were the magical mirrors each had a magical property. The first could see all things in the past. The second could show hidden forces like ghosts, and the third could tell the future.
Nooro never believed the magical mirrors existed. Nooro often used to ask his grandmother whether she had seen them. His grandmother used to tell him that she had never seen them. Akbar, Nooro’s grandfather, would tell her about the powers of those magical mirrors. “I would like to see those mirrors if I get a chance,” Nooro often said to his grandmother. Because of the strong security in the castle, Nooro had never got chance to enter the castle.
In the evening, an attendant of the castle came to see Nooro. “Hey, Chacha Bakhshal! It’s been long since I saw you!” said Nooro as he hugged him. Bakhshal was his father’s friend and helped Nooro’s family after the death of Nooro’s father.
“I have been sent by prince Asad. He wants to get the mansion repaired. He has invited you to the castle tomorrow.”
“What? Really?”
“Yes.”
Nooro was going to get the chance to enter the old castle after 20 years. The prince was a generious man. He said to Nooro, “You will be given a good reward, if you bring back the originality of the castle back.”
“Surely, your highness. Ask your attendants to tell me the exact shape of the castle. I will do the repairs according to the suggested shape. Well, I don’t need any other reward than just three mirrors from this old castle.”
The prince laughed at the Nooro’s demand. “Look at him, folks! He demands three old mirrors instead of gold and silver!” All the attendants of the castle laughed at him.
“The demand is accepted. You can take any mirrors out of the castle,” said the prince. Nooro started the work. He found many mirrors in the castle, but he did not make a hustle. He recalled what his grandmother had told him about the mirrors. He said to Bakhshal, “Help me find the mirrors that I tell you. The first is a circular brown framed mirror with a handle. It is about 8 inches and has a dark brown trim. It gives as clear reflection as a blue sky. The second is a circular frameless mirror. Its size is 11 inches. This mirror is a concave which magnifies the image being reflected. The third is almost identical to the first, except it is cracked and broken. This mirror has an amber trim and severe crack in the bottom half which detracts from the overall aesthetic.”
Bakhshal was surprised to listen the instructions he gave about the mirrors. “How do you know these mirrors?” he asked Nooro.
“It is a long story. First let’s find the mirrors.” Eventually, they found the mirrors. When Nooro looked in the mirrors they did nothing.
“Why are you looking these mirrors so closely?” asked Bakhshal.
“These are very unique mirrors. I had heard about these mirrors.” Nooro replied. He took the mirrors home. He tried hard to recall the spell that was cast on the mirrors. He couldn’t remember the spell that his grandmother had told him, so he just kept the mirrors at home.
Nooro finished the repairs in the castle, and the prince was very pleased the work. Nooro kept trying different spells for about a month, but none of them worked. He got very angry and dropped the framed mirror on the floor. Luckily, the mirror was safe. However, the frame was broken. A little, white piece of paper came out of the frame. The paper read: “Mirror, mirror of the castle. I order you to show your power.”
“This is it. This is the spell,” shouted Nooro. He hurriedly cast the spell to the mirror he dropped. That mirror could see all the things in the past. Then he casted the spell to the frameless mirror. It could show the minor things and ghosts. Finally, he checked the third mirror. It could see the future. It could tell what will happen in coming two days.
Nooro was beside himself. He had become the powerful man of the world. He could see the past, ghosts, and the future. Nooro experienced with the mirrors for three months.
He realized that if these mirrors were given to the prince, he would utilize them for the betterment of the people and world. So he decided to tell the secrets of the mirrors to the prince and return the mirrors. Nooro didn’t know that the prince would reward him the whole castle because of his honesty and trust in the prince. His future mirror could only tell for two days not more than that. When Nooro revealed the secrets of the mirrors in front of all the attendants of the castle, nobody believed him. Then he showed them. The prince could see his deceased grandmother through the magical mirror which showed the past. One by one, Nooro casted the spell on each mirror and showed the prince and attendants the power of these mirrors.
“How did you know about these mirrors?” asked the prince.
“Your majesty, when I was a kid. My grandmother used to tell me about these magical mirrors. My grandfather had told her about them.”
The prince gave Nooro golden coins and silver, and said to all the people there, “Today we have become so busy that we don’t have a minute for our elders. In fact, what our elders can teach us, we might not be able to learn on our own. I wish I had spent time with my elders so that I could have learned something to utilize in my life.”
After a month, the prince called Nooro and offered him to live in the castle with his family.
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